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Becky Hayward's avatar

Damn! One of my favorite things about your writing is how smart it is, but it also never takes itself too seriously. Additionally you touch on and tap into feelings we all struggle with. Cracking up at the beginning when she’s finishing This Book May Kill You, but then damn, relatable all the rest. I’m so behind but glad to be catching up now! Great Chapter 1!

Miles Carnegie's avatar

As always thank you for the kind words! I'm glad you're digging it. Nothing is what it seems...

Becky Hayward's avatar

Looking forward to the rest! Was kind of nice to let them pile up and binge read 😂 But back to my Friday routine now

Alicia's avatar

This story feels personal. I was transported directly back to a time when my life was owned by the company store. Excited to read more!

PVT's Working Class Experience's avatar

Wow - this is such a tense, disturbing read: lives subjugated to the demands of work; attention shattered by a billion digital demands; a relationship being slowly jimmied apart by the simple fact the doomscroll is more compelling. The phrasing is tight and neatly-constructed, the tension is palpable and the characters are, in their own quiet way, tragic. Looking forward to see where this goes in future chapters!

Miles Carnegie's avatar

Ironic or sad that so many couples have this as a template for their existences currently.I suppose that's the real horror.

PVT's Working Class Experience's avatar

Ironic and sad indeed. I like to think it’s still not the majority of couples, but it’s still horrifying for anyone to be living like this.

Gregory Blair's avatar

My god, Miles! This is so good! Endlessly astute, concisely-crafted quotable lines.

Monica A Leyva's avatar

The tension here is carried in what isn’t said. The small details do the work.

That bottle, the unanswered moments, the repetition of delay. It all accumulates in a way that feels very real. I am curious to see how this unfolds.

Miles Carnegie's avatar

Well it's going to get worse before it gets better, but I'm sure you already knew that!

Monica A Leyva's avatar

I would be disappointed otherwise Miles

M.O.Stewart Writes Dark Stuff's avatar

Great characterization, and I’m eager to see where this heads!

Miles Carnegie's avatar

Thank you! Lady was a character I really wanted to get right from the jump, so this means a lot. Buckle up.

Kate's avatar

This is awesome! I love the escalating dread brought on by small details, like the wine bottle that shouldn't be there.

Miles Carnegie's avatar

🙏 More of that’s coming. See you Friday.