"Do you feel power when you squash a spider?" is the line that stays. Pine's banality as the 'killer' is more unsettling than any explicit horror—the procedural mind treating violence like inventory management. The Taneski coda is interesting but the story doesn't need the explanation; it already speaks. Congrats!
I'm glad that spider line stuck with you! 'Inventory management' is exactly the headspace I wanted for Pine. As for the Taneski link, I only included that because, as dark as the story gets, the real-world inspiration was actually much bleaker. I appreciate the sharp eye and the kind words!
"Do you feel power when you squash a spider?" is the line that stays. Pine's banality as the 'killer' is more unsettling than any explicit horror—the procedural mind treating violence like inventory management. The Taneski coda is interesting but the story doesn't need the explanation; it already speaks. Congrats!
I'm glad that spider line stuck with you! 'Inventory management' is exactly the headspace I wanted for Pine. As for the Taneski link, I only included that because, as dark as the story gets, the real-world inspiration was actually much bleaker. I appreciate the sharp eye and the kind words!
This is so captivating - I really enjoyed reading it.
Fantastic work, very intimidating and fascinating that there is a real case behind it! Amazing writing! 👍🏻
The real case files were even bleaker. Thanks for reading.