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Miles, This was brilliantly done. The restraint is what made it hit so hard. You let repetition, tone, and tiny behavioral shifts build the terror instead of forcing it, and that made the ending feel even more devastating. Mallory is such a strong anchor for the reader because her attention feels both obsessive and completely justified. The dead birds, the formal language, the smiles, the way concern gets translated into procedure. All of it was chilling. Excellent work. Monica

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